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Yama Kaji by
Rated:XXX [Reviews: 2]

Summary:

Two Leafeon's meet as they try to outrun a forest fire, only to find themselves trapped, and alone in the burning forest.

There is no escape from the flames, but they have time left, and there are a few fantasies neither of them have lived...

  1. Yama Kaji (4902 words) [Reviews: 2]

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    Reviewer: fuzzy
    Date:Oct 20 2012 Chapter:Yama Kaji
    Great story! It was a pleasure reading it.

    I didnt see any mistakes, the grammar was good, the characters where solid and the whole thing felt well thought out.

    The only thing im not sure about is the talking seemed a bit clunky sometimes, and the male Leafeon... Well, lets just say he seemed very blank at times.

    Right, so... I think I can give you a good six out of ten. But beyond a few things I didnt like, I would love to see another chapter where they go off and see that thing they allways wanted.

    Well, all the best! -Fuzzy
     
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    The Wild-Card!
    Reviewer: Captain_Dragonuv
    Date:Jul 14 2013 Chapter:Yama Kaji
    Awesomeness here. Had me in fear for a while until they started mating. And the ending: win!

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