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Of Ambitions (1505 words)
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Of Flowers and Suitors (1793 words)
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Date:Mar 1 2013 Chapter:Of Ambitions
Interesting story and characters, but somewhat lacking in description. Because of this, the pacing of the story seems rather fast, and it's hard to visualize exactly what's going on in every scene. Some more description to give the reader a full view of where the characters lie rather than just how they interact and feel would give the reader a break from the incessant plot advancing.
Holds promise, but plenty of room for improvement. Keep writing!
--Cyn
Thanks for the review! I kinda just wrote this story as a writing exercise, so detail wasn't exactly what I had in mind. But I'll definitely try and make it better! Thanks a bunch for the input!