AGNPH Stories

Summary:

A riolu with amnesia wakes up near a waterfall within the ancient region of skywind falls. The only thing he knows are his name, Rokio, and a fuzzy image that nags at the back of his mind. Those that awaken him, a flareon named Fren and an Eevee called Flaria, take him back to castle town where he decides to join with them in their exploration team along with three others. Together, they overcome many trials during the missions given to them by the guild in Castle Town, and search for a way for Rokio to get his memories back.

  1. Chapter 1: Skywind Falls (4236 words) [Reviews: 1]

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    Friendly resident Cyndaquil
    Reviewer: Cyn
    Date:Apr 12 2013 Chapter:Chapter 1: Skywind Falls

    The amount of description and detail seems pretty good and the characters seem interesting so far.  Definitely will keep an eye on this when you update.


    Only things I noticed that could be fixed are various small errors like missing capitalization and misplaced punctuation.  Also perhaps a bit of an overuse of commas, although I tend to do the same thing.


    Didn't know you did writing, Sorrow.  Keep it up!

    Author's Response:
    thanks alot. some of those errors are due to the occasion of me having to use a phone to edit it, and the commas, well, ive never seemed to be able to not use so many xD though of course, im not making excuses :3
    glad to see that i got a good review on my first chapter, and first ever submitted piece of literature. thanks a bunch~