Join Noah the Linoone as he discovers the joys and pains of raising a kid.
Parenthood 2014 Contest Entry
To be a Father
(5555 words) [Reviews: 3]
You accomplished a lot here to show the struggles of a single, adoptive parent in the context of the pokemon world. I could feel Noah's pain and stressful moments throughout, underscored by the uphill battle he faces as a mere linoone, and the vividly depicted battles helped to support your overarching plot. My only criticism is that it feels like more could easily be done with this story. Regardless, it is a worthy entry into the month's contest on its own merits, whether or not it wins the prize by default, and sets a high standard for any other submissions that may come along.
Thanks so much for the detailed review! I know I'm not a superb writer, and any pointers in the right direction are greatly appreciated.
Scott's gender switch was indeed a typo, some careless revising on my part. At the current time this is a one-shot fic, so no future chapters unfortunately. At the start when writing this, I wasn't sure how much backstory was needed and/or if I wanted to continue this storyline in the future (also, due to lack of experience writing short stories).
And yes, most of the background team members were filler to get the group up to 6 (I didn't see a good way to route the plot around this fact). But hey, Caden has a powerful team, he deserves to have the full 6 (or 7).