Memories
Well it's my first attempt to write a story so please be nice to me =^.^=
The Veridian Incident
Memories
It was a clear sunny day. Some pidgeots were flying through the sky and beneath them walked a boy. 1, 97 metres tall, 19 years old, dark brown hair and wearing a white-blue shirt and jeans. On his back a big Backpack. An Observer might think
he was one of the thousands of Pokemontrainers who wants to get Pokemonmaster but in fact he wasn't.
His name was Daniel and in his opinion no one had the right to catch a life and let it fight against other pathetic souls with the same destiny. Daniel was on his way from Cerulean to Viridian City. He just finished school some months ago and decided to get a job somewhere far away from home.
He liked his home in Cerulean City but it was time to get away. To get independent from his parents and start a new life. But of course things are not as easy as it seems.
***
A loud bang followed the explosion which destroyed the whole Veridian Gym. Smoke was rising above the remains of the Gym.
People were running panicly around. But no one saw the white beam moving through the sky. From time to time some
pieces of metal were falling down from the head of it. After a while it got slower and finally stopped for a moment before
it felt down from the sky.
***
Daniel was walking apart the trail when he suddenly heard something rushing through the branches and bird Pokemon
flying panicly away. How humans are he was curios about what might happened there. He made his way through the forest where
he met a few scared Caterpies. "What has frightened them this much?" he thought. Daniel continued his way. What he found was strange and...and...pretty? Directly in front of him laid the strangest creature he had ever seen and it looked seriously injured. Daniel stood there for at least 2 minutes and stared down to the purple-white and unconscious body of a Pokemon he never had heard about.
Slowly Daniel approached the creature. It - or better said she - looked really strange.
Two necks, short white fur, three spherical fingers on each hand, pretty breasts, long catlike legs and a long purple tail. Somehow cute...
***
Hours later.
Daniel didn't exactly know why but he couldn't leave this poor creature. He never had much to do with Pokemon
but something held him there and now he was sitting on a tree trunk in front of a fire he made when it was getting colder.
A few pairs of eyes were watching him out of the darkness around him. Suddenly he heard someone moaning. "Finally awake huh?"
Daniel giggled when he saw the Pokemon opened its eyes and watched Daniel frightened. "Hm. Do you want something to eat?" he asked and gave her one of his candy bars. He wasn't good at cooking so it was all he had to eat on his journey. She took it nervously and took a bite.
"I know Pokemon shouldn't eat such things but I don't have anything else." Daniel said and
stared into the fire. "Thank you" a soft and clear voice said. "Nah" Daniel shook his head. He was tired and already began to hea- "Who...who are you?" the voice said again.
Daniel couldn't say where it came from. It was like he heard it in his head.
Two questioning eyes stared in his direction. "Uh. Sorry. Did you SAY something?!"
"Who are you?" the voice in his head asked again and hell it wasn't one of his.
Daniel looked onto the use-by date of his candy bar. Everything ok. Was he getting crazy now?
"Uh...My name is Daniel" he said a bit frightened.
-Silence-
"Are you the one speaking in my head?"
"Yes"
Bad situation. Nobody prepared Daniel to make conversation with a Pokemon. Things like this should only happen in movies or
silly Stories by even more silly people. Hell...that was too much.
"Um. and what's your name?" he asked nervous
"I don't know..."
"Oh. Uhm. I guess you can't remember what happened to you?"
"No. What happened?"
Strange, pretty and without memory. This was getting worse every minute.
"I don't know. That's why I asked." Daniel sighed. "Can you remember anything? What kind of Pokemon are you?"
The catlike creature on the ground was thinking. Daniel looked expectationful.
"No, I don't know..." it answered.
"Hmph." Daniel rubbed his head. "You...you should sleep. Maybe your memory will come back during night." He sighed again and unpacked his sleeping bag. A few moments later he lay on his back. The creature shivered in the cold and looked to Daniel. "No" he thought.
-Silence again-
"Damn OK. Take this cover." he said and got a cover out of his backpack and threw it over to her. With a smile on her lips she approached to him and caught the cover. She lay down next to him and stared with her blue eyes directly to Daniel. But he was fed up for today and turned around trying to sleep. "Thank you...Daniel"
Again this voice in his head.
"No problem...I guess" he answered and soon he fell asleep
***
An Ocean. Bubbles were rising to the surface. A voice whispered "Who am I?" It was a dream. It couldn't be anything else. Daniel looked through the eyes of someone else and the voice whispered "What am I?"
A small and catlike creature swam through the water. It broke through the surface of the water. "I am ready...to be, to be" Was it the small, now flying cat which spoke? No. It was a different voice. It was soft and... female?
The view changed. Darkness. No air to breath. "This is not the same." The voice said. It was close now. Slowly the eyes Daniel looked through opened. Everything looked creepy. Some humans were standing around. They were watching him. Daniel couldn't see their faces. "Was everything before just a dream? Why?"
Suddenly another female voice.
"Doctor, look at this." She said. "What?" a male voice.
"Its brain waves, they're surging!" "Let me see!"
Voices. So many voices. "She's right!" "Let's run another scan." "Its Mind is racing"
"Those voices..." Daniel felt anger. "I hope we don't lose this one!" What were all these voices talking about?
"They're outside..."
"We can't lose this one!"
"Where I must be"
Suddenly everything around started to glow in an ice-blue light. He could feel his surroundings. Glass shattered. Broken pieces were flying around and an orange liquid float away. Coldness. Everything looked absolutely clear now. The humans surrounded him.
"Tell Giovanni what happened" a voice said. "Quiet! Let hear its psychic powers" the man, a scientist, in front of him said.
"Psychic Powers?" He recognized this voice but it felt like Daniel thought it himself.
"For years we struggled to successfully clone a Pokemon to prove our theories. But you're the first specimen to survive!"
***
Suddenly Daniel woke up. His heart was beating fast and for a short moment he didn't even know where he was. The sound of a shivering Pokemon speaking in its sleep reminded him.
"Looks like you can speak" He whispered not to wake her up. She was mumbling something about experiments. Could it be?! "Impossible... " Daniel approached her even more trying to understand more. Her shivering got stronger and suddenly she started to glow. Again an ice-blue light. Carefully Daniel laid his hand on her head starting to stroke her gently. Immediately she started to calm down. "Please don't start to purr now" Daniel giggled tranquil.
The feeling of her short fur beneath his fingers and her warmth made him a bit happy.
Daniel continued this for a few minutes and suddenly she opened her eyes and turned around to him. "Sorry! I didn't want wake you up!" She felt her head and looked questioning.
"You had a bad dream. I just tried to calm you." Both looked deep in each others eyes. Daniel was astonished by the look of her blue-coloured eyes. She hasn't said a word since she woke up but now she moved closer and curled up beside Daniel. He looked surprised and was shocked when she asked him to stroke her again. But somehow he was happy she said - or better thought - this. "No problem" he whispered and again he started to stroke her head.
What he couldn't see: A tear was running down her white cheek. She could remember her dream and it wasn't something she wanted to be reminded on.
Daniel felt asleep again and luckily he had no more visionary dreams.
The unknown Creature beside him didn't sleep. She only nestled deeper into the cover and stared thoughtfully into the fire.
***
The sun was just rising above the horizon. Everything was set in a golden shine when a catlike creature with white and purple fur woke up. She stood up and noticed she was alone. The big backpack and the sleeping bag were still there but Daniel was gone. She looked around fearfully. There was silence around. Every Pokemon around the encampment felt she was different. And now she could remember why. After this bad flashback-like dream she knew again why they didn't like her. She was just a copy of a Pokemon. Like shadow an-
"Good morning!" a loud voice yelled. She turned around and saw a tall boy with a bucket in his hand. When he approached a smile appeared on her face. "I already wondered whether you'll ever get awake." He said "Where have you been?" "I got some water. Oh and please stop this telepathic-talking." Daniel requested. "I'm used to hear other people talking but not to get their thoughts in my head." And demonstratively he shook his head. The creature seemed to think a while until she finally asked �Better? "
"Yes." Daniel said with a satisfied smile. Slowly he began to pack his things, including the sleeping bag and the cover, into his backpack. Suddenly he stopped. "I almost forgot. Do you remember anything now? Especially your name. It's hard to talk with someone not knowing his name."
She kept silent for a moment. Yes she could remember a few things but there were still big breaks in her memory and what she could remember wasn't something she wanted to. "I think it's...it's Mewtu." She said after a while. "Mew-tu. Hm. I think I've heard this before but I don't know where or in which connection. Your name sounds like you where just a copy of something." Daniel chuckled. Mewtu looked on the ground. After all she was just a copy. "Hey what's wrong? I didn't want to hurt. It was just a joke." Suddenly Daniel remembered this terrible dream again. It wasn't his dream but hers. And if it was a flashback instead of a dream she was really a copy. "Are you ok?" He approached her and laid his hand on her shoulder. "I'm fine. I'm fine... It isn't your fault." Mewtu felt how the anger rose in her. She could remember those scientists and what they said. She was nothing but a shadow. A copy of Mew they said. But there was still something missing in her memory. "Well, where are you going now?" Daniel asked after a while of silence. "I don't even know where I came from so how should I know where to go now?" "Good point" Daniel thought "Where are you going?" Mewtu asked. "I was on my way to Viridian City. I hope to find a job or something else there." He answered. He needed money. (Who doesn't? ...) "And if I don't find anything, I'll continue to the next city and so on." Both didn't say anything for a minute. "I'll join you." the soft female voice beside Daniel said. "Ok..." Somehow he already had hoped she would say that. "Let's pack up and go. We could be in Viridian in two days"
***
They were both walking through the forest trying to find the trail again. It was already noon. "I could swear I came from this direction. But it didn't take this much time to find you."
"We got lost, right?"
"No! We're in the Viridian Forest."
"If you say so..."
Two voices beneath the trees complained. A Caterpie watched the scene from its position in a tree and it saw something strange. It saw a human walking along with a purple-white furred Pokemon. Even more strange was the fact that they were arguing with each other about which direction to go. "Don't you have a map?" "Yes I do. But we don't need a map! Especially if we don't know where we are." The human mumbled "So we got lost." "No!" Both sighed.
***
Daniel looked up when suddenly a bright blue light were shining in a tree. "Hey look! A Caterpie evolved into a Metapod." He yelled. "Why?" the female voice beside him asked "Well I think it got enough experience. I wonder how. There wasn't a fight." "Where shall we go now?" Mewtu started the discussion again. "How about this direction?" Daniel asked and pointed south. "Viridian City is in the south." "If you say so." "I do!" They continued their way south and left a very happy Metapod behind.
***
Hours later. It got already dark and an ice-cold breeze flew between the trees. Mewtu and his travel-companion had looked for a nice place to stay over. The fact that it looked like the same from last night made them a bit nervous. After Daniel set up their little camp they sat down near the fire and looked into the night.
"Well...you can remember your past, huh?" Daniel asked after a while of silence. Mewtu closed her eyes. Yes she could remember some things but nothing she wanted to be remembered on. "Yes." She answered slowly
"Ok. Now that you travel along with me you could tell me about" Daniel said with a smile on his lips. "I can only remember a few things..."
"Go on." "I'm sure you don't want to hear it." "I want and please don't argue about that with me." He said impatiently.
"Well I...All I can remember is that I woke up someday in a tank out of glass filled with a strange liquid. There were some strange people around and I broke up the tank. They said something about an experiment." Mewtu told him with a sad voice. "So it's true. It was her dream and not mines. But how is that possible?" Daniel thought
"The spoke about psychic powers and that they cloned me from another Pokemon. They called it Mew" She continued.
"A...clone? ... Of course! That's why your name sounded familiar to me." Daniel said. "And what happened after this?" "I don't know. Somehow I can't remember more. But as you can see I am nothing more than a shadow of another Pokemon. Nothing more than a copy" the feline creature said while a tear were running down her cheek. Gently Daniel cleared her cheek. "Come on. It's ok. You're an individual and no shadow." Daniel said and lay his right arm around her waist and slowly stroke her head with his left arm. They sat there for at least an hour. Mewtu cried silently while Daniel did his best to calm her. When she finally stopped Daniel stood up and unpacked his sleeping bag and the big cover and laid it near a trunk which seemed to be familiar to him. "I'm sure tomorrow everything looks better. He said with a played smile." Mewtu stood up too and after Daniel took a last gulp of his bottle of water he lay down and crawled into the sleeping bag. Mewtu did nearly the same and nestled into the cover. "Nice dreams." he said with sarcastically sound. "Thank you. Good night."
Well that's it, that's it
Thx for wasting your time with this story and please be gentle with your reviews. I'm sure I'll write a second chapter
Send suggestions and comments to [email protected]
The Veridian Incident
Memories
It was a clear sunny day. Some pidgeots were flying through the sky and beneath them walked a boy. 1, 97 metres tall, 19 years old, dark brown hair and wearing a white-blue shirt and jeans. On his back a big Backpack. An Observer might think
he was one of the thousands of Pokemontrainers who wants to get Pokemonmaster but in fact he wasn't.
His name was Daniel and in his opinion no one had the right to catch a life and let it fight against other pathetic souls with the same destiny. Daniel was on his way from Cerulean to Viridian City. He just finished school some months ago and decided to get a job somewhere far away from home.
He liked his home in Cerulean City but it was time to get away. To get independent from his parents and start a new life. But of course things are not as easy as it seems.
***
A loud bang followed the explosion which destroyed the whole Veridian Gym. Smoke was rising above the remains of the Gym.
People were running panicly around. But no one saw the white beam moving through the sky. From time to time some
pieces of metal were falling down from the head of it. After a while it got slower and finally stopped for a moment before
it felt down from the sky.
***
Daniel was walking apart the trail when he suddenly heard something rushing through the branches and bird Pokemon
flying panicly away. How humans are he was curios about what might happened there. He made his way through the forest where
he met a few scared Caterpies. "What has frightened them this much?" he thought. Daniel continued his way. What he found was strange and...and...pretty? Directly in front of him laid the strangest creature he had ever seen and it looked seriously injured. Daniel stood there for at least 2 minutes and stared down to the purple-white and unconscious body of a Pokemon he never had heard about.
Slowly Daniel approached the creature. It - or better said she - looked really strange.
Two necks, short white fur, three spherical fingers on each hand, pretty breasts, long catlike legs and a long purple tail. Somehow cute...
***
Hours later.
Daniel didn't exactly know why but he couldn't leave this poor creature. He never had much to do with Pokemon
but something held him there and now he was sitting on a tree trunk in front of a fire he made when it was getting colder.
A few pairs of eyes were watching him out of the darkness around him. Suddenly he heard someone moaning. "Finally awake huh?"
Daniel giggled when he saw the Pokemon opened its eyes and watched Daniel frightened. "Hm. Do you want something to eat?" he asked and gave her one of his candy bars. He wasn't good at cooking so it was all he had to eat on his journey. She took it nervously and took a bite.
"I know Pokemon shouldn't eat such things but I don't have anything else." Daniel said and
stared into the fire. "Thank you" a soft and clear voice said. "Nah" Daniel shook his head. He was tired and already began to hea- "Who...who are you?" the voice said again.
Daniel couldn't say where it came from. It was like he heard it in his head.
Two questioning eyes stared in his direction. "Uh. Sorry. Did you SAY something?!"
"Who are you?" the voice in his head asked again and hell it wasn't one of his.
Daniel looked onto the use-by date of his candy bar. Everything ok. Was he getting crazy now?
"Uh...My name is Daniel" he said a bit frightened.
-Silence-
"Are you the one speaking in my head?"
"Yes"
Bad situation. Nobody prepared Daniel to make conversation with a Pokemon. Things like this should only happen in movies or
silly Stories by even more silly people. Hell...that was too much.
"Um. and what's your name?" he asked nervous
"I don't know..."
"Oh. Uhm. I guess you can't remember what happened to you?"
"No. What happened?"
Strange, pretty and without memory. This was getting worse every minute.
"I don't know. That's why I asked." Daniel sighed. "Can you remember anything? What kind of Pokemon are you?"
The catlike creature on the ground was thinking. Daniel looked expectationful.
"No, I don't know..." it answered.
"Hmph." Daniel rubbed his head. "You...you should sleep. Maybe your memory will come back during night." He sighed again and unpacked his sleeping bag. A few moments later he lay on his back. The creature shivered in the cold and looked to Daniel. "No" he thought.
-Silence again-
"Damn OK. Take this cover." he said and got a cover out of his backpack and threw it over to her. With a smile on her lips she approached to him and caught the cover. She lay down next to him and stared with her blue eyes directly to Daniel. But he was fed up for today and turned around trying to sleep. "Thank you...Daniel"
Again this voice in his head.
"No problem...I guess" he answered and soon he fell asleep
***
An Ocean. Bubbles were rising to the surface. A voice whispered "Who am I?" It was a dream. It couldn't be anything else. Daniel looked through the eyes of someone else and the voice whispered "What am I?"
A small and catlike creature swam through the water. It broke through the surface of the water. "I am ready...to be, to be" Was it the small, now flying cat which spoke? No. It was a different voice. It was soft and... female?
The view changed. Darkness. No air to breath. "This is not the same." The voice said. It was close now. Slowly the eyes Daniel looked through opened. Everything looked creepy. Some humans were standing around. They were watching him. Daniel couldn't see their faces. "Was everything before just a dream? Why?"
Suddenly another female voice.
"Doctor, look at this." She said. "What?" a male voice.
"Its brain waves, they're surging!" "Let me see!"
Voices. So many voices. "She's right!" "Let's run another scan." "Its Mind is racing"
"Those voices..." Daniel felt anger. "I hope we don't lose this one!" What were all these voices talking about?
"They're outside..."
"We can't lose this one!"
"Where I must be"
Suddenly everything around started to glow in an ice-blue light. He could feel his surroundings. Glass shattered. Broken pieces were flying around and an orange liquid float away. Coldness. Everything looked absolutely clear now. The humans surrounded him.
"Tell Giovanni what happened" a voice said. "Quiet! Let hear its psychic powers" the man, a scientist, in front of him said.
"Psychic Powers?" He recognized this voice but it felt like Daniel thought it himself.
"For years we struggled to successfully clone a Pokemon to prove our theories. But you're the first specimen to survive!"
***
Suddenly Daniel woke up. His heart was beating fast and for a short moment he didn't even know where he was. The sound of a shivering Pokemon speaking in its sleep reminded him.
"Looks like you can speak" He whispered not to wake her up. She was mumbling something about experiments. Could it be?! "Impossible... " Daniel approached her even more trying to understand more. Her shivering got stronger and suddenly she started to glow. Again an ice-blue light. Carefully Daniel laid his hand on her head starting to stroke her gently. Immediately she started to calm down. "Please don't start to purr now" Daniel giggled tranquil.
The feeling of her short fur beneath his fingers and her warmth made him a bit happy.
Daniel continued this for a few minutes and suddenly she opened her eyes and turned around to him. "Sorry! I didn't want wake you up!" She felt her head and looked questioning.
"You had a bad dream. I just tried to calm you." Both looked deep in each others eyes. Daniel was astonished by the look of her blue-coloured eyes. She hasn't said a word since she woke up but now she moved closer and curled up beside Daniel. He looked surprised and was shocked when she asked him to stroke her again. But somehow he was happy she said - or better thought - this. "No problem" he whispered and again he started to stroke her head.
What he couldn't see: A tear was running down her white cheek. She could remember her dream and it wasn't something she wanted to be reminded on.
Daniel felt asleep again and luckily he had no more visionary dreams.
The unknown Creature beside him didn't sleep. She only nestled deeper into the cover and stared thoughtfully into the fire.
***
The sun was just rising above the horizon. Everything was set in a golden shine when a catlike creature with white and purple fur woke up. She stood up and noticed she was alone. The big backpack and the sleeping bag were still there but Daniel was gone. She looked around fearfully. There was silence around. Every Pokemon around the encampment felt she was different. And now she could remember why. After this bad flashback-like dream she knew again why they didn't like her. She was just a copy of a Pokemon. Like shadow an-
"Good morning!" a loud voice yelled. She turned around and saw a tall boy with a bucket in his hand. When he approached a smile appeared on her face. "I already wondered whether you'll ever get awake." He said "Where have you been?" "I got some water. Oh and please stop this telepathic-talking." Daniel requested. "I'm used to hear other people talking but not to get their thoughts in my head." And demonstratively he shook his head. The creature seemed to think a while until she finally asked �Better? "
"Yes." Daniel said with a satisfied smile. Slowly he began to pack his things, including the sleeping bag and the cover, into his backpack. Suddenly he stopped. "I almost forgot. Do you remember anything now? Especially your name. It's hard to talk with someone not knowing his name."
She kept silent for a moment. Yes she could remember a few things but there were still big breaks in her memory and what she could remember wasn't something she wanted to. "I think it's...it's Mewtu." She said after a while. "Mew-tu. Hm. I think I've heard this before but I don't know where or in which connection. Your name sounds like you where just a copy of something." Daniel chuckled. Mewtu looked on the ground. After all she was just a copy. "Hey what's wrong? I didn't want to hurt. It was just a joke." Suddenly Daniel remembered this terrible dream again. It wasn't his dream but hers. And if it was a flashback instead of a dream she was really a copy. "Are you ok?" He approached her and laid his hand on her shoulder. "I'm fine. I'm fine... It isn't your fault." Mewtu felt how the anger rose in her. She could remember those scientists and what they said. She was nothing but a shadow. A copy of Mew they said. But there was still something missing in her memory. "Well, where are you going now?" Daniel asked after a while of silence. "I don't even know where I came from so how should I know where to go now?" "Good point" Daniel thought "Where are you going?" Mewtu asked. "I was on my way to Viridian City. I hope to find a job or something else there." He answered. He needed money. (Who doesn't? ...) "And if I don't find anything, I'll continue to the next city and so on." Both didn't say anything for a minute. "I'll join you." the soft female voice beside Daniel said. "Ok..." Somehow he already had hoped she would say that. "Let's pack up and go. We could be in Viridian in two days"
***
They were both walking through the forest trying to find the trail again. It was already noon. "I could swear I came from this direction. But it didn't take this much time to find you."
"We got lost, right?"
"No! We're in the Viridian Forest."
"If you say so..."
Two voices beneath the trees complained. A Caterpie watched the scene from its position in a tree and it saw something strange. It saw a human walking along with a purple-white furred Pokemon. Even more strange was the fact that they were arguing with each other about which direction to go. "Don't you have a map?" "Yes I do. But we don't need a map! Especially if we don't know where we are." The human mumbled "So we got lost." "No!" Both sighed.
***
Daniel looked up when suddenly a bright blue light were shining in a tree. "Hey look! A Caterpie evolved into a Metapod." He yelled. "Why?" the female voice beside him asked "Well I think it got enough experience. I wonder how. There wasn't a fight." "Where shall we go now?" Mewtu started the discussion again. "How about this direction?" Daniel asked and pointed south. "Viridian City is in the south." "If you say so." "I do!" They continued their way south and left a very happy Metapod behind.
***
Hours later. It got already dark and an ice-cold breeze flew between the trees. Mewtu and his travel-companion had looked for a nice place to stay over. The fact that it looked like the same from last night made them a bit nervous. After Daniel set up their little camp they sat down near the fire and looked into the night.
"Well...you can remember your past, huh?" Daniel asked after a while of silence. Mewtu closed her eyes. Yes she could remember some things but nothing she wanted to be remembered on. "Yes." She answered slowly
"Ok. Now that you travel along with me you could tell me about" Daniel said with a smile on his lips. "I can only remember a few things..."
"Go on." "I'm sure you don't want to hear it." "I want and please don't argue about that with me." He said impatiently.
"Well I...All I can remember is that I woke up someday in a tank out of glass filled with a strange liquid. There were some strange people around and I broke up the tank. They said something about an experiment." Mewtu told him with a sad voice. "So it's true. It was her dream and not mines. But how is that possible?" Daniel thought
"The spoke about psychic powers and that they cloned me from another Pokemon. They called it Mew" She continued.
"A...clone? ... Of course! That's why your name sounded familiar to me." Daniel said. "And what happened after this?" "I don't know. Somehow I can't remember more. But as you can see I am nothing more than a shadow of another Pokemon. Nothing more than a copy" the feline creature said while a tear were running down her cheek. Gently Daniel cleared her cheek. "Come on. It's ok. You're an individual and no shadow." Daniel said and lay his right arm around her waist and slowly stroke her head with his left arm. They sat there for at least an hour. Mewtu cried silently while Daniel did his best to calm her. When she finally stopped Daniel stood up and unpacked his sleeping bag and the big cover and laid it near a trunk which seemed to be familiar to him. "I'm sure tomorrow everything looks better. He said with a played smile." Mewtu stood up too and after Daniel took a last gulp of his bottle of water he lay down and crawled into the sleeping bag. Mewtu did nearly the same and nestled into the cover. "Nice dreams." he said with sarcastically sound. "Thank you. Good night."
Well that's it, that's it
Thx for wasting your time with this story and please be gentle with your reviews. I'm sure I'll write a second chapter
Send suggestions and comments to [email protected]