Ash rescues a Vaporeon from an abusive trainer, so she decides to repay him for his good deed... ^-^IIf this looks like Water Vapors, that's where I got the idea for this fic. Gomen if I'm plagiarizing...
Okay then... That was...different. Extremely non-canon, and the opening was harsh, with the rest simply rushed. And with the final scene, I can only imagine what Ash's other Pokemon were thinking as they watched him screw Vaporeon while eating their dinner...
Little mistakes in spelling/grammar, good theme--with somewhat poor execution--and formatting issues. Overall: C-
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Date:Sep 10 2013 Chapter:Whisper in the water
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Okay then... That was...different. Extremely non-canon, and the opening was harsh, with the rest simply rushed. And with the final scene, I can only imagine what Ash's other Pokemon were thinking as they watched him screw Vaporeon while eating their dinner...
Little mistakes in spelling/grammar, good theme--with somewhat poor execution--and formatting issues. Overall: C-