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Halloween Fever by
Rated:XXX [Reviews: 2]

Summary:

Four friends celebrate Halloween in a secluded cabin, little do they know what lies in wait.
As we all know, deep in the woods, no one can hear you scream.

Oh, and this isn't for the contest. At least I didnt plan it that way. I dont think it fits it theme very well.

Happy Halloween Everybody. ^^

Story Notes:

Came up with this on accident a few months back and was like OMG that's perfect for Halloween, so I waited till now to write it. I was gonna release it ON Halloween, but tommorow I'm leaving to Michigan to visit family whose internet sucks, and friends whose parents are very christian. So pokemon porn sites are a little out of the question.It's me, so expect a human male and some sort of female pokemon. You'll figure out which soon enough. :)

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    The Wild-Card!
    Reviewer: Captain_Dragonuv
    Date:Apr 16 2013 Chapter:No Man's Land
    Nice ghost story.

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    Reviewer: SINistral
    Date:Feb 2 2016

    It was an entertaining read, but you should clarify whose speaking. It's easy to get lost in the exchanges of dialogue between the friends.

    Also, Joel's ghost monologue could've been broken up with snippets of the actions from the others. Such as Conner rolling his eyes or Bill stifling a giggle while he thinks of a joke.

    You also tend to begin "telling" rather than "showing" during time transitions; car trip, gaming, etc.

    Slight grammar errors where you probably hesitated with a word or spell check wouldn't have pick up.