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Author's Chapter Notes:
I posted this story here awhile ago, but I recently redid it and added a (to me) much needed scene for the poor Quilava left all alone.
Chapter 1
"Sorry about that. I thought you were wild. I'm Terrance, but everyone just calls my Terry. Where's you trainer?" "Pun" she says shrugging "Well then, let's go find him." He picks her up, pulling an Oran berry out of his backpack and handing it to her. She takes it and starts nibbling on it, and he puts her on his shoulder.
*10 minutes later* "Ebony, use Flamethrower!" The quilava opens his mouth, shooting flames out and hitting 3 mightyena. "What is up with this forest? That is the 5th pack of mightyena so far! And I was being left alone until I picked you up. What's going on?" He says looking at the lopunny on his shoulder. "Lo" she says blushing, pointing downwards. He looks down and there's nothing on the ground, and he looks back at her with a quizzical look on his face. "What am I looking for?" She blushes again, spreading her legs and pointing between them. He looks between her legs and catches a glance of her slit, dripping and red before she quickly closes her legs again. "Oh. I get it! You're in heat, and so Pokémon are catching your scent and want some action." She starts blushing even harder, and nods. "I heard that when a Pokémon is in heat, if they don't get relief, it starts to hurt. Are you in pain?" he asks her, met with another nod. "If you like, I can have Ebony help you, I've known him his whole life, and he would never hurt anyone without cause, so he would be gentle. I can find a clearing, and keep other pokemon away if you wanted. I'm sure he would be happy to help." She starts shaking her head no vigorously. "LO!"
"You don't want his help? Do you want any help at all?" "Lo pun" she says blushing with a slight, almost imperceptible nod. "Well? What kind of help would you like?" She leans over and licks his ear, and he shudders, looking at her in shock. "You want my help?" She nods her head slightly, blushing even more. "Umm, ok then." Title The Lost Lopunny
They keep walking until they reach a clearing, also filled with a variety of flowers and their scents that will help mask her heat. She jumps off his shoulders and walks over to the middle of the clearing. He follows her over, sitting down beside her. He turns to her and is suddenly pushed down by the sudden weight change of the lopunny throwing herself at him. He looks up at her, their eyes meeting, a look of pure lust in her eyes. She get's off and stands between his legs, and attempts to undo the button and zipper on his pants. "Here," he says chuckling, "let me help." He uses his foot to push his shoe off, then pushes his other one off. Then he reaches down and unbuttons his pants, and undoes the zipper, pulling his pants down, lifting his butt off the ground and pulling them all the way off. He's in just his boxers, shirt and socks, but she still isn't happy with that. She struggles with the waistband of his boxers, until he hooks his fingers around the waistband and pulls them down, taking them off completely. She looks down at his soft member, poking it. She wraps her fingers around it, slowly trying to rub it until it's hard. "Try sucking on it." She looks at him, nodding and going back to his member. She leans down and licks it, taking the head into her mouth and sucking, eliciting a moan from him. She continues to suck on it while it grows hard in her mouth, Terry watching her suck on it. It get's bigger and bigger in her mouth, filling it up until it reaches it's full 7 inch length. She stops sucking on it, then climbs up onto his lap, aligning her slit with his rod, lowering herself down and impaling herself on his cock. She moans loudly from his rod entering her, sliding all the way down and hilting herself. He let's out a groan of his own, his cock getting squeezed by her tunnel, her juices leaking out around his cock. She screams when she feels him all the way inside her, climaxing and spraying her juice all over his cock, panting and holding still to get accustomed to his size and regain her breath. She soon gets her breath back and starts bouncing on his cock using her strong legs, letting her weight bring her back down on his cock. She bounces repeatedly on his cock, cumming again. He grabs her waist, turning over so she's on her back and he's above her, and starts thrusting, burying his cock into her cunt, her quivering tunnel squeezing his cock, her cunt juices leaking out and getting absorbed into the ground. He starts sliding in and out, holding on to her waist so she doesn't move while he fucks her. Her cunt squeezes his rod, trying to get him in deeper, and he slams in and out rapidly, going as deep as he can with every thrust. She screams again, spraying even more of her juices, her walls clamping down on his rod, the feeling too much for him to handle again and he moans with her, shooting his cum and spraying her walls with his seed, flooding her womb with it. There's too much, and it starts leaking out around his cock, adding to the juices that already got absorbed by the ground.
He pulls his rod out of her tunnel, his cum gushing out of her now opened entrance. He leans down to her slit, lapping at her folds, slurping up the cum he himslf deposited there, soon replaced by her juices that were leaking freely again. He sticks his tongue into her tunnel, lapping up all the juices leaking from her cunt, her moaning filling the small clearing. His tongue flicks across her clit, more juices flowing out, seeping into the ground. He sucks the little nub into his mouth, sucking on it, flicking his tongue across it. Her back arches into the air, and she screams again, her pussy quivering, having orgasm after orgasm by the relentless assault from his tongue. He licks up all the juice that leaked out, cleaning her off one final time, stopping his licking. She lays there in the grass, panting heavily and too tired to move.
"Quil." His head snaps around to the side, just now noticing his Quilava standing a couple feet away, sporting an erection. "Heh, you couldn't resist her heat either, huh boy? Sorry about that, I don't think she would be willing to go again though, she looks too tuckered out. Well, come here boy. I feel it's my fault anyways, so I'll help you out."
The Quilava walks over, flopping onto his back, his member swaying from the movement. Terry looks at the red rod in front of him, slowly reaching out and grabbing it, feeling it throb beneath his fingers, a drop of precum oozing out, which he leans forward and licks up, finding the taste to be quite enjoyable.
He slowly lowered his mouth over his best friend's member, sucking on it gently. The Quilava moans gently, laying his head back in pleasure from his trainer's mouth. The cock in his mouth starts leaking pre freely now, dribbling into the sucking mouth of Terry, who gladly licks up all the pre oozing out. The member twitches inside his mouth, another spurt of pre entering his mouth. He lowers his head down, engulfing the entire rod, sucking on it more forcefully now. The pokemon bucks into his mouth, unable to control himself. The rod is small enough that it doesn't reach his throat, but he can certainly feel it going far into his mouth. He goes back to sucking on the tip gently, licking around the point.
He suddenly engulfs the whole member into his mouth, the member throbbing and heating up, and the Quilava starts fucking his face in earnest now, only managing a few short thrusts before he unloads his molten seed into his trainer's sucking mouth, the cum getting slurped down and flowing down his throat. He swallows all the cum, rising and licking his lips of any cum he might have missed.
"Well, that was fun." He says with a smile, only getting a nod from the two tired pokemon, laying on the ground panting. Well, come on, let's go to the city, maybe someone there will know who you belong to." He says, getting dressed. After throwing his clothes on, he picks up the lopunny, putting her back on his shoulder, walking towards the nearest city again, Ebony in tow.
*25 minutes later*
He steps out of the forest, leaving the trees behind and walking down the street. They cross a hill, the city coming into view.
"Ebony, return." He points the Pokéball at the quilava, and it opens up, the Pokémon getting hit by a red beam that envelops it, swallowing the quilava and pulling it into the Pokéball. "YUKA!" He turns towards the sound, seeing a little girl. She runs up to him and the lopunny jumps off his shoulder, crashing into the little girl and knocking her over. "Oh, where have you been Yuka?" "Oh? This must be your lopunny then?" He asks the little girl. She looks up at him, gratitude on her face. "Yes! Thank you for finding her!" "Well, she seems to know you, so you're welcome. Now, if you excuse me, I'm off to the gym to get my next badge. Have fun."
"OK! Thank you mister!" "No problem." He says, waving over his shoulder as he walks away, heading in the direction of the gym.
Chapter End Notes:
If you see any spelling or grammar errors, let me know so I can fix them. And for those that don't know me, I can't come up with my own ideas for stories, so if you have any suggestions or requests, let me know those too. Thanks and let me know what you thought of it altogether.
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Date:Nov 28 2012 Chapter:Chapter 1
Now, I'll be forward in that I don't have a lot to say on the story: It's a relatively simple short story after all. Enjoyable for what it is, although I myself just prefer longer well-developed plots and such.
As for something to touch up on, you definately need to try to split up paragraphs better. It's a small thing, but it's appreciated. Usually after every speech/action of different characters it's good to throw it in. Just read a couple older stories here and you'll get a general idea on certain things worth separating so that it doesn't become a wall of text.
Also, I must confess that the first sentence is amusingly repetitive. "One day, on an enjoyable spring day, ..." Just a bit silly. Small hiccups like that fix themselves with practice though, so it's no harm no foul.
Nonetheless, keep up the pace! This section welcomes new writers!
As for a story idea, I'm unfortunate to say I'm untalented in writing myself. There just usually isn't much going on in my cranium, so I won't be of much help.
Really? Hmm, I thought I split the sentences up rather well. Guess not. But that first sentence was supposed to sound just a tad bit cheesy :)
Date:Nov 30 2012 Chapter:Chapter 1
I love Lopunny stories and this one wasn't bad at all. Most excellent.
Date:Dec 16 2012 Chapter:Chapter 1
Date:Dec 23 2012 Chapter:Chapter 1
Although, I will halfta agree with Anger Incarnate alil. Some was a bit tricky to keep up with, so a few more line breakers would be appreciated.
I'm not much of a Grammar nazi, but my dad is and because of that I've gotten quite adept at proofreading.
If you like, I could go through and make the few corrections needed to make this an easier read--and even spice up the sex alil.
Really? Doesn't seem like it from your review....