A Tyranitar has trouble with one love and finds a new love with his best friend. *Edit* I forgot to mention that the characters within were based on a suggestion by Average.
I found this enjoyable enough, the dialog was a little clunky but there were no errors or mistakes. I think if it was longer or maybe had a second chapter, I could feel it would deserve more points...
But as it stands I could give you a solid 6/10.
Good work, try to keep a high level of focus next time; helps bulk out the story rather than skipping to the "Good stuff"
Date:Nov 11 2012 Chapter:Chp. 1
I found this enjoyable enough, the dialog was a little clunky but there were no errors or mistakes. I think if it was longer or maybe had a second chapter, I could feel it would deserve more points...
But as it stands I could give you a solid 6/10.
Good work, try to keep a high level of focus next time; helps bulk out the story rather than skipping to the "Good stuff"
All the best! -Fuzzy