Right from the start it throws you into mid into an event to capture. I was drawn to read more. The emotions were well played although I did have one gripe. The use of brackets which don't quite work that well in the sentence with Skysong and make it feel off. Also the usage of them in other areas like (What the hell.) and so on, don't work in that way. 

If you google how to write thought, you will find the articles expressing correct ways, which would be italics without quotations or depending on style almost like direct speech but clarifying it with 'he thought.' I don't like the latter as it makes it unclear to me, even if correct. This is applicable for direct internal dialogue,'phychic therfore still fits this category. To clarify it's being spoken to another you may use quotation marks in this case but there's no set grammar 

Sorry its its just a minor feedback point and hope it helps. 

Other great points were were that you painted a vivid picture, with movements of character and discriptions. I loved the way you described landing inside the structure, things like oxidising etc to draw the colours out more for my mind to invisions hues of orange or the other scene of Mew dragging a leg in the way you also then allowed it to paint a posture. 

I really enjoyed the story, well done.