First blush, VERY short. Rushed. And quite puzzlingly, the format was highly unusual.
HOWEVER; it was a nice change of pace--odd as it was--and hopefully you can improve!
For now, you're getting a low score, BUT should you take my advice and improve greatly & rewrite this, I my take this low-score back and give you a higher one.
Date:Oct 29 2016 Chapter:Royally fucked
First blush, VERY short. Rushed. And quite puzzlingly, the format was highly unusual.
HOWEVER; it was a nice change of pace--odd as it was--and hopefully you can improve!
For now, you're getting a low score, BUT should you take my advice and improve greatly & rewrite this, I my take this low-score back and give you a higher one.