Eh... ALthough it's good to see multiple stories being put out, I feel they are all a bit rushed...

And not to mention, how were we to tell if these characters are feral or anthro in body-type?

Sorry to say, gonna lose a point here with this one...

 It was hot, but there were quite a bit of noticable spelling errors, and way too many ~.  It's harder to find a better way to put lust and adoration into text than just adding ~ to a sentence, but it works out a lot better in the end. 

the story should've ended before the time skip