Anger Incarnate Here!
Now, I'll be forward in that I don't have a lot to say on the story: It's a relatively simple short story after all. Enjoyable for what it is, although I myself just prefer longer well-developed plots and such.

As for something to touch up on, you definately need to try to split up paragraphs better. It's a small thing, but it's appreciated. Usually after every speech/action of different characters it's good to throw it in. Just read a couple older stories here and you'll get a general idea on certain things worth separating so that it doesn't become a wall of text.

Also, I must confess that the first sentence is amusingly repetitive. "One day, on an enjoyable spring day, ..." Just a bit silly. Small hiccups like that fix themselves with practice though, so it's no harm no foul.

Nonetheless, keep up the pace! This section welcomes new writers!

As for a story idea, I'm unfortunate to say I'm untalented in writing myself. There just usually isn't much going on in my cranium, so I won't be of much help.

I love Lopunny stories and this one wasn't bad at all. Most excellent.

Nice story! It is very well made but at some points it seems rushed. I enjoyed reading it thought and look forward to read more!

Good work here.

Although, I will halfta agree with Anger Incarnate alil. Some was a bit tricky to keep up with, so a few more line breakers would be appreciated.
I'm not much of a Grammar nazi, but my dad is and because of that I've gotten quite adept at proofreading.
If you like, I could go through and make the few corrections needed to make this an easier read--and even spice up the sex alil.