Story Notes:
Well, this is another request by Archer. Enjoy one and all.I'll add Categories here as I can't do so after submitting my story for the first time.It's sexless at first, but it gets better through the story.
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Chapter 1 (3012 words)
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Chapter 2 (1824 words)
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Chapter 3 (4505 words)
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Chapter 4 (3258 words)
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Chapter 5 (2583 words)
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Chapter 6 (2470 words)
Date:Jun 12 2016 Chapter:Chapter 1
Good start, if a touch short. I'll be reading more!
Also, not sure if it was you, or the site's formatting, but do try to space out the 'end chapter notes' so it doesn't seem like part of the story.
Date:Jun 12 2016 Chapter:Chapter 2
Well done, though a few spots are sketchy. And at least you offered an apology for the 'false' language, though a forewarning would have also been nice.
Keep it up.
Date:Jun 14 2016 Chapter:Chapter 3
A couple plot-holes, and again with the fake language.
I do have one such example of said plot-hole, but it contains a spoiler for readers checking out reviews...
When Stan was bit, it was stated that a Gardevoir could have seen it coming. Now, it is cannon that a Gardevoir can see into the future and use its full power to protect its trainer; and also cannon that some Pokemon can and will escape thier Pokeball--examples including Misty's Psyduck and Jesse's Wobbefett--at will, so that whole scene seems askew.
Other than that, keep it up.