AGNPH Stories


July "Bring the Heat" Contest 2010

Paul, Cream, Blake, Luca, and Ela are on semester break from College and decide to take a vaction in the Orange Islands, when Paul has a really strange Dream. Or was it a Dream.

  1. Chapter 1 (3975 words) [Reviews: 1]

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    The Wild-Card!
    Reviewer: Captain_Dragonuv
    Date:Jan 6 2013 Chapter:Chapter 1
    Very nice work.

    However, I had a hard time trying to piece who was who. Like many readers, my brain animates the story while it's being read. Sadly, your character's identities were late in being revealed, or not even at all.

    Point in case, by the end of the story we have learned that...
    -Ela is a Luxray (revealed near begining)
    -Luca is a Lucario
    -Cream is--most likely--a Lopunny.
    -Blake has a tail

    If these characters were in another sotry/series you wrote, then you may want to mention that at the opening author's note and/or introduce them for first time readers.

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