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Disclaimer: All publicly recognizable characters, settings, etc. are the property of their respective owners. The original characters and plot however are my creation. I am in no way associated with the owners, creators, or producers of any media franchise. No profit is being made from this, nor am I expecting any profit to be made, no copyright infringement is intended.
Now that that's out of the way, I want to thank a fellow author by the name of Felix. His story, "Luca", is the semi-inspiration for this story. I contacted him and I asked if it was ok to have his characters make a few cameo appearances later in my story, to which he had this to say,
---"Thank you very much for asking. I would be honored to even have one cameo in your story!"---
So with that end, I guess I'm gonna cameo it up! lol
Seriously though, Felix is a great writer and I encourage everyone to read his stories which can be found here ----> http://agn.ph/fics/viewuser.php?uid=164
Like this story, don't like this story? Either way, drop a review and lemme know ^_^. Anyway, thanks for clicking on the link and at least giving Mina a try!
NEW!
For those who have ever even visited the forum, it has been revised due to the site overhaul. The new link is this: http://forums.agn.ph/index.php?topic=38.msg282#msg282
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Chapter 0: Prologue. (10825 words)
[Reviews: 4] Chapter Zero is Mina and Luke's back story. It happens when they are young, so there will be no sex in this chapter. There is however a very tender loving moment. I pride my stories for their plot more than smut, but I assure you, there will be smut later on.
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Chapter 1: Nyan Fox 'or' Happy Birthday. (19084 words)
chapter 1! finally it's done! In this chapter, we get a clear, or not so clear, view of where Mina and Luke's relationship is. Also, there is a guy you will meet named Jean, I imagine him to have a sort of Brooklyn/Italian accent, but its hard to say that in the story, because in that world, Brooklyn and Italy do not exist. Anyway, I hope you enjoy this chapter, and the super secret scene at the end for all my adoring fans! ;D
(Edit) For the people who've already read the chapter!
there is a scene in which Luke talks about going to Sinnoh. This was a typo. What I actually meant was Heonn. I have made the necessary corrections, I apologize for the missleadings. -
Chapter 2: A Long Road Ahead. (6403 words)
After Mina's birthday surprise, the two set out on their journey to Opelucid City for a contest. Along the way they meet a stranger who gives them a bit of trouble.
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Chapter 3: To Kill a Chatot. (6358 words)
In this chapter, Luke and Mina attempt to remedy Caleb's oppressive views on his pokemon. Not all goes as planned though as the group gets attacked by a mysterious man.
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Chapter 4: Today's Forecast; Rainy with a chance of conquest! (8150 words)
[Reviews: 2] In this chapter, Caleb finds out about Luke and Mina's relationship and takes it pretty hard. The group comes across the National weather institute and decide to take a tour there.
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Chapter 5: Enter Archangel. (9058 words)
[Reviews: 2] Our heroes manage to escape from their captors, but escaping is not an option. Archangel has the entire facility on lock down. What is their goal? Who is in control? And what are they after?
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Chapter 6: The Lonely Angel. (6558 words)
[Reviews: 4] Day 1 of Luke's rest. With the life of her love's on the line, tensions are mounting. Mina uses Caleb to vent her frustrations and she raises questions about the trainer's mixed and often contradictory emotions. He decides to reveal a secret he has harbored since before he became a trainer.
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Chapter 7: When in Poke'land, do as The Pokemon do. (12397 words)
[Reviews: 2] Caleb gets a little more than he bargained for when Mina fulfills his wishes and turns him into a pokemon.
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Chapter 8: Absol-ute Adventure. (13883 words)
[Reviews: 3] Caleb meets a pokemon and decides to spend his day with her. He then gets more than he bargained for when he discovers what it is like to be a pokemon in the wild.
*Warning*
This chapter Contains short scenes of a pokemon being killed and then consumed as a means of conveying the "circle of life." Reader discretion is advised. -
Chapter 9: Face Off! Caleb's Return! (13016 words) [Reviews: 1]
As expected, Caleb comes back after spending the night with Azure. Now as a real Absol, he must face the pokemon he had claimed to be on his side.
On another note. Luke Finally wakes up and is greeted by the pleasant chaos that ensues.
Date:Dec 10 2013 Chapter:Chapter 7: When in Poke'land, do as The Pokemon do.
still a few minor mistakes here and there, mostly paragraph breaking from different speakers.
Thanks a lot. As for mistakes, I read through it and found a lot of them and fixed some here and there. It may sound conceited of me, but I think i'm good at writing, but my proof reading skills really suffer because of it lol. I would ask someone else to do it, but I highly doubt that anyone would be up to the task.
Thanks as always!
-Crystal
Date:Dec 14 2013 Chapter:Chapter 7: When in Poke'land, do as The Pokemon do.
That was actually pretty good. Mina's irresponsibility with Caleb makes sense with her character (being a bit naive about the world around her, such as when she payed too much at a store for instance).
You also managed to take the whole "turning into a Pokemon" thing in a refreshingly new direction to what I've seen before, and like the other reviewer stated, the Pokeball scene was really well executed.
Till next time,
Scratch.
Oh, I wouldn't say her actions were out of Naivety, more like giving him the whole experience? She talks about it in the next chapter and it makes more sense... Not many people know this, but I'm not too good with words lol. As for the getting turned into a pokemon direction thing, I'm not too sure how a lot of people do it but I'm glad you think it's a great change from the norm.
As always, thanks for reading and your review! I look forward to hearing more from you no matter what it is you say. ^_^
-Crystal
Date:Jan 7 2014 Chapter:Chapter 8: Absol-ute Adventure.
Although if I were Caleb I would have rutted Azure hard!
HA! I can't tell you how much I wanted to write a sex scene here. Azure and Caleb are good for each other and scenes like that'll have to wait given the circumstances. I guess you'll have to wait for rutting lol. For now, you'll have to settle for the tease ;)
Thanks for the review.
-Crystal
Date:Jan 9 2014 Chapter:Chapter 8: Absol-ute Adventure.
You know, as far as confronting the reality of pokemon having to eat other pokemon Carnivorously, I can't recall reading nearly as many stories that go in depth as this chapter did. Sure there's stories about Vore that have near complete focus around the devouring process, but they don't have the advantage of predispositions in their characters like Caleb does. Then again, those stories are mostly one-chapter tidbits with virtually no development, and I can't grasp the attraction to Vore myself. A niche best out of reach, perhaps.
Besides that, it is welcome that Caleb moves up into being a Plot Eccentric character. A welcome accompaniament to our already stable Protagonists at this point. Caleb definately started off no more than an Obstacle, but he's making a name for himself! Backstory definately makes him more interesting, as it should, and adds mysteries to unveil in later chapters.
I can't say I was hunting for mistakes or oddities, so I can only state I'm just as interested in the next chapter!
8/10
(Good to be back)
Welcome back Anger Incarnate. I'm glad that you decided to stop by after so long away and drop me a review!
While we are on the topic of Vore, I don't see the appeal either, and you may be relieved to know that I probably won't be writing any of it :/ except for probably a side story in a separate story just for the people who ARE into it...
I'm glad that Caleb's ascension to plot character-hood is welcomed. He really took on a mind of his own.
But yea, thanks for your review and I hope you enjoy the story. Even if you don't enjoy the story, just let me know what's wrong with it. I have a forum that consists of me just talking to myself at the moment lol. Feel free to post there or what ever 7_7.
-Crystal
Date:Jan 9 2014 Chapter:Chapter 8: Absol-ute Adventure.
Good job with this one. I don't really think you needed to add the warning, as it just scares people off (it even got me cautious). In the end it was pretty short, and (this really deserves recognition) actually relevant to the plot; not nearly as bad as you made it up to me (for which I am personally thankful).
Besides that, this is pretty well written, and I have to applaud you avoiding the "liar revealed" plot at the end (you know the one: we found out you're lying, we hate you, time passes, we like you). You've got me so interested. So much so that I find myself losing interest in the original plot of "Mina". But I'll leave it up to you to change my mind on that.
Greatly looking forward to more (of Calebs adventures),
Scratch
Uh, yea... I guess I can tone down the warning just a little bit. I still need it there just because, eh you know. Some people are REALLY squeemish about that and I don't want them to walk in blind lol. I'll change it a bit so it's not as forboding. thanks for that tip.
I'm glad you thought it was well written, but I am sure that there are many errors scattered through out the story (something that I'll have to clean up later). As for the "Liar reviled" plot, yes I know it well, and truthfully, I think it's over played even though I kind of did it myself just a little bit in earlier chapters. Not only that but while I was writing Azure's character, I genuinely didn't think she would care at all. I believe that a lot of people would think that her not caring would just be me trying to cop out of writing drama, but that's not the case lol.
Either way, Thanks a lot, I'm glad you liked it!
-Crystal
Date:Apr 19 2014 Chapter:Chapter 9: Face Off! Caleb's Return!
I am looking forward to the next chapter. I know the feeling of having a GIGANTIC course load and it literally leaves no time to write, play video games, etc...and with exams just ahead...ugh. But I do really want to see what is in store for the gang when you are writing ready! But anyway...
You have here what is only found in a handful of other fics on this site, a story that is interesting, fun to read, and emotionally moving. Thanks for the great read!
Thanks a lot for your comment! I'm glad you're enjoying it. Strap yourself in and get ready for a ride, cuz this story is gonna be long ;D. Also, yea, I've had a big workload this semester, but it's almost over, and with it I'll get right back to writing.
Date:Jun 1 2016 Chapter:Chapter 0: Prologue.
More, please. And do you have contact with Felix, by any chance?
Date:Jun 2 2016 Chapter:Chapter 6: The Lonely Angel.
In paragraph 6 you should have said, Luke, I am your father!
Date:Dec 9 2017
*screams quietly* Aaahhhhh dangit this story is good!
I *wish* I could write this well!
Seriously though, I love the way you handled all the elements of this story. I'm kind of sad to see it hasn't updated in a while, but at the same time, I'm not the kind of guy to pester you for more uploads. For now, i'm just gonna leave it at this: thanks for writing and uploading this wonderful emotional ride. Writers like you have a certain way of keeping readers hooked, and I LOVE finding stories like this that latch onto me and dont let go. I hope to see more from you in the future!
~the Sword of Absol