Warning, horribly written. Something I wrote awhile back... Any how, Brock is trapped in a cave, and he finds some female Pokemon that want to have sex with him...
This showed up in the random-story spot. And... If I'm being honest...
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I can't... I can't even be blunt. The idea seemed great from the summary. But the execution...
Sweet, merciful Arceus; give me stregnth....
SO many errors!!!!!!!
Spelling, grammar, sentence-structure... Every little detail and lesson from growing up with a quasi-Grammar-Nazi, I had to force myself through this ordeal... This... This... farce of an 'erotic' fanfic.
I'm deeply sorry, I tried to like it, but I'm going to give you a low score. There's far-too much that needs improvement. If you'd like, I'd be happy to go through and highlight EVERYTHING that needs correcting, or even do a complete re-write. Again, great concept, but horrible execution.
[Reviews: 2] 
Date:Apr 17 2018 Chapter:the cave
Looked long and hard for this one and finally found it again after a decade. Still holds up as some most excellent fluff.
Date:Aug 2 2018 Chapter:the cave
This showed up in the random-story spot. And... If I'm being honest...
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I can't... I can't even be blunt. The idea seemed great from the summary. But the execution...
Sweet, merciful Arceus; give me stregnth....
SO many errors!!!!!!!
Spelling, grammar, sentence-structure... Every little detail and lesson from growing up with a quasi-Grammar-Nazi, I had to force myself through this ordeal... This... This... farce of an 'erotic' fanfic.
I'm deeply sorry, I tried to like it, but I'm going to give you a low score. There's far-too much that needs improvement. If you'd like, I'd be happy to go through and highlight EVERYTHING that needs correcting, or even do a complete re-write. Again, great concept, but horrible execution.