This is a really nice story that I can see going in more than on direction. Your focus on short and sweet chapters is a nice change up and shows that you do not have to write a ton to get a good story across. The only small complaint I have is that it was never stated what gender Tesla was until chapter 2. But it is nothing major and doesn't mess up the story what so ever. 

Can't wait to read more.

I think you did a good job on the last two chapters but make sure to release a full chapter. Lewd is great but remember that you want to release a good story and that begins by making sure to release a full chapter. I've been in the same boat where I have so much left over from one chapter that I use it as another one, but make sure to look back and make sure you have a good product before putting it out. There was slight spelling mistakes in the chapter and the text bump thing at the end was sort of a eye sore. I think you could have had the sex scene be longer, that starts by adding details to it and spend a little time telling things like how it makes your main character feel, using your senses to describe the scene and find small things to fill in text with. Quality over quanity. Still though I think you are still onto something good just take a bit more time putting together a good quality product that reflects your talent and ideas.

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Ho. Ly. Shit. I never thought I'd ever see this much sex in one chapter. Absolutely blew my mind. (And my load x3) Keep it up Tesla! You're such a descriptive writer and I love it! ^w^

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Great opening to the story! I love the characters already, and they seem so good together! Ship Teslaya! XD

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Absolutely amazing sex scene! So cute and loving, and the detail is awesome! Keep it up Tesla!

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XD Tesla got cockblocked! Hehe great story. I'm loving these two characters! 

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Holy crap! This chapter terrified me! I hope Tesla is okay after going through this. I'm not really a huge fan of horror, but still a great chapter!

I waited until you finished the chapter before reviewing it, as much as I wanted to review it earlier today. I will give you praise, then faults I saw and finish with pointers. 

Praise: Overall a budding story, your focus on helping us the readers to understand your characters show. Telsa falls into the hero/main character role of the story well, who has a good personality but has faults that make him more realistic. He is youthful, but has a old soul about him because of his past. He bonded quickly with Maya because he was searching for some source of comfort and got lucky that she was sort of in the same boat as him. Maya falls into the role of lover/side kick well, she helps to covers Telsa's weakness and has shown that she will stick with him through and though. I like this pair and want to see where you take them.

Faults: There is a lack of strong detailing of your enviroment. You do not describe the scene very well, not only in this chapter but throughout the story. All the way back to their first home which I feel could have used some defining. Remember you are writing in first person, which means you should be having Telsa describe the scene as he sees it. When I write my stories I write from third person and spend alot of time decribing a scene because remember we the readers are not able to see what is happening, we have to use the power of your words to get that picture in our minds. Also in your sex scenes, there is a lack of detail and I believe you run though them slightly quickly. Also I found it hard to get a sense of why Telsa was in the cave for 3 weeks. You did not describe him getting lost in the cave which would have worked well in this situation or how he managed to survive that long. Did he have food and water? Also was he attacked again during that time? Details will help to answer these type of questions.

Pointers: You are doing a good job with this story, but try to describe what is happening better. Use the power of your senses to describe the world around Telsa and use the power of details to help give your story much more color and depth. Adding depth to your story will make your characters deeper and help the reader to understand them better. Like I would like to know more about Telsa and his past, how old is he(since you said in this current chapter that he lost his brother ten years ago. Do Pokemon in your story age like humans do?), and what is his future plans. The Poochyena I am interested in as well, does he return or was he just a one time character. I normally do not name my characters if I do not want to bring them back, but your story has had the dark pup featured twice now. Also where are your characters now? I would like to know more about the world around them and if there others living in their little patch of woods, lake or where ever you have them. 

Summed up: Good track, but lets build on it now and make a deeper world. 6/10