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Luca - 2nd Edition by
Rated:XXX [Reviews: 12]

Summary:

The story of the trainer Felix and his very special Riolu, Luca. Their relationship is sweet, strained, complex, and everything in between.

This is the remastered version of my story, Luca. In going back to the beginning I found I was editing the story significantly. So I decided to post it as new! : )
I hope you enjoy the changes I've made, and if this is the first time you've found this series, I hope you enjoy it for the first time. Be aware it follows the original edition, but has quite a few changes, including new scenes, and rewritten scenes.

At present there are no love scenes edited. Ratings follow the original as this will eventually hold all the same themes and material.

Story Notes:

Disclaimer: All publicly recognizable characters, settings, etc. are the property of their respective owners. The original characters and plot are the property of me,Felix9. The author is in no way associated with the owners, creators, or producers of any media franchise. No copyright infringement is intended.

  1. Chapter 1 - A Rare Gift (13236 words) [Reviews: 5]

    A strange man comes to a lucky trainer baring a very special gift. Felix and his Ninetales Lady are about to have their lives changed forever by a sweet little Riolu named Luca.

  2. Chapter 2 - Luca Evolves (4446 words)

    A year after first meeting Luca she has become one of the family. So much so that something unexpected happens to her one day. Will this event break up the trio?

  3. Chapter 3 - Tournament (16764 words)

    Still getting used to her new body, Luca and the others find a tournament to enter. With the hopes it will help get the Lucario acquainted with her new form, the trio enters. Unfortunately, not everyone is as happy go lucky as Felix and his girls when it comes to official tournaments...

  4. Chapter 4 - Contest Tragedy (22539 words)

    After their arduous win at the Tournament Felix and the girls decide on a change of pace. While planning to take a cruise they decide to enter a pokemon contest as well. Running into family along the way, will anyone be the same when disaster strikes?

  5. Chapter 5 - Team Darkrai Rises (29823 words) [Reviews: 1]

    The group follows through with their plans to take a vacation. With Felix still reeling from the close call, will he be able to look at the girls the same again? Might the egg Felix's sister carries give him a new outlook? And what happens when our hero's find themselves in the midst of a rising evil...? Will it tear Felix and his girls apart or bring them closer than ever?

    I apologize for the delay and having to delete the chapter. I hope you enjoy this chapter and if I may ask, please let me know what you think of the changes to the erm... intimate scene. In reading over it I could hardly believe I wrote it and I'm wondering which my audience likes more. Comments are greatly appreciated. Hope you all enjoy a late Thanksgiving present. ^^;

  6. Chapter 6 - Taking Down Darkrai (15330 words) [Reviews: 1]

    After their night together and adding a member to their team, Felix and Luca set off to find their friends and escape Darkrai's island. But when one of the group is taken captive at the facility, is it worth risking everyone's freedom to save just one? Once more, what else could be hidden in the depths of Darkrai's facility?

  7. Chapter 7 - Returning Home (13005 words)

    Having survived their encounter with Team Darkrai Felix and his party head home. With everyone safe and healthy little could dampen the moods of the heros. But what happens when an unexpected consequence of their island adventure is brought to their attention?

  8. Chapter 8 - A Father Exposed (15726 words) [Reviews: 1]

    Finally home after their trying ordeal, our intrepid couple has a bit of explaining to do to Felix's family. How will they react to the news that Luca is pregnant? And will they be allowed to stay after they find out who the father is...? Also, something her father told her has been bothering Luca. What could this mean for the couple's bond?

  9. Chapter 9 - A New Addition (11825 words) [Reviews: 1]

    After an extended visit at home Luca is about ready to pop!, but how will this change the lives of everyone? With the events of the ship and island still lingering in the proud new parent's minds, is it time to make a new life or does their new addition deserve to see the world as Luca did?

  10. Chapter 10 - A Grunt's Revenge (8632 words)

    How can life get any better? A caring mate, a new child and loving friends. However, when an old enemy finds the intrepid group, will they be as lucky as the first time...?

  11. Chapter 11 - Getting By (10921 words)

    After their unexpected fight Felix is left in grave condition... Can a past foe become a new ally? Who would trust someone like that?

  12. Chapter 12 - Repairing Relations (15652 words) [Reviews: 2]

    While traveling back towards home the group finally begins to bend under the stress of their recent experiences. But it seems that's not the only thing bothering some of the group...

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    Reviewer: fuzzy
    Date:Oct 13 2012 Chapter:Chapter 1 - A Rare Gift
    Great googlie mooglie! As soon as all the chapters are up, I will be the happiest Jolteon alive!

    First chapter was nice and lengthy, and very well worded. I did spot one tiny error somewhere which was a misplaced "the".

    But I'm loving it so far, and I hope that you can add more to it. I am really looking forward to this gem of a story getting the polish up and love that it needs.

    All the best, Fuzzy.
     
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    Reviewer: lightning
    Date:Oct 14 2012 Chapter:Chapter 1 - A Rare Gift
    The story is still young so I can not give you a 10 but I am likeing it so far.

    I have not read the first edition yet but I am likeing the story so far.

    charecters are likeable "realistic" (meaning personalities are believable)

    Story seems to be solid so far.

    A story that wants me to keep reading. you sir have earned a fave.
     
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    Reviewer: Hironada
    Date:Nov 24 2012 Chapter:Chapter 1 - A Rare Gift
    AWESOME! :D I looooved the 1st edition, hopefully this will be even better! AND I WANT THAT SEQUEL >:(
     
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    Reviewer: freewill
    Date:Jan 15 2013 Chapter:Chapter 6 - Taking Down Darkrai
    Loveing it can't wait... I know im pushing it by asking but please hurry with the next chapter, im hungry for your writeing.
     
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    Reviewer: Spabble
    Date:Jan 18 2013 Chapter:Chapter 1 - A Rare Gift
    I read the original Luca a while ago, back when it was on the old AGNPH. I loved it. There's something about your writing style that just grips me. Being an editor, though, I'd like to point out a few grammatical particulars:

    1) When you're writing a quote and you attach a speech tag (e.g., "said Luca") to it, don't treat it as a separate sentence.
    Right: "Hello," said Luca.
    Wrong: "Hello." Said Luca.
    Right: "Hello!" said Luca.
    Wrong: "Hello!" Said Luca.
    Right: "Hello?" said Luca.
    Wrong: "Hello?" Said Luca.

    So passages like:
    “Oh.” She replied quickly
    should be instead:
    “Oh,” she replied quickly

    2) "Alright" and "ok" are not words. They should be written as "all right" and "okay" (or "OK").

    3) Beware of overusing ellipses (the "..." things). Use at most one per paragraph; overusing them reduces their impact, which means people won't regard them as really having much meaning after a while.

    4) Don't use both an exclamation point and a question mark, and don't use multiple exclamation points or multiple question marks. Same thing as with the ellipses; use them too much, and they lose their impact. Use more intense description to get the point across more effectively.
    Right: "What?", "What!"
    Wrong: "What!!", "What??", "What!?", "What?!?!???!?!!!"

    Thanks for reading this. Keep in mind that grammar isn't what makes an author great. Grammar is just the icing on top of the cake of stories. Luca is done very well, but a little extra icing definitely won't hurt! :)
     
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    Friendly resident Cyndaquil
    Reviewer: Cyn
    Date:Feb 2 2013 Chapter:Chapter 5 - Team Darkrai Rises

    As always, superb work.  I really like the addition of the new scenes, especially the ballroom dancing in this chapter.  Makes it much clearer where Felix and Luca stand in terms of their relationship at this point in time.


    The changes from the old version like trainer names and pokemon teams were a bit weird to get used to at first, but the story still flows quite nicely.


    Not much I could pick out to work on, as mentioned before perhaps a little less use of '...', and a couple of typos here and there.


    Can't wait until Chapter 8, been an avid fan of this story for at least 5 years.


    -- Cyn


     

     
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    Reviewer: freewill
    Date:Jun 8 2013 Chapter:Chapter 8 - A Father Exposed
    Awsome as always dude can't wait for the next chapter. I spotted a few spelling mistakes (Not like I can talk) but that doesn't damage the amazeing story plot at all, in fact I'd say it gives it some character (I'm sure their are some poeple out there that disagree but I'm not writeing this to nod and simply accept the veiws of others, I'm writeing this to broadcast my own) but I digress, so basicly I enjoyed this new chapter alot and the only mistakes I could see were so small and insignificant that it didn't effect the overall at all so keep up the good work and I hope to see the next chepter up soon. :)
     
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    Reviewer: kolofox
    Date:May 28 2014 Chapter:Chapter 1 - A Rare Gift
    aw man i loved the first edition and so far i'm loving the second even more, I hope you update soon
     
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    Reviewer: shard
    Date:May 29 2014 Chapter:Chapter 9 - A New Addition
    I'm not gonna lie, I have read the original multiple times, as it is one of my favorite stories by far, but I am really falling head over heels at the 2nd Edition. I look forward to it's continuation whenever you get around to it =D
     
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    Reviewer: wxp_73
    Date:May 31 2016

    PLEASE KEEP GOING!!!

     
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